Children's writing: The Unseen Cave - by Shawaiz

 

You have taken lots of time and care to build a picture of your character, Shawaiz. You layer images on top of each other, and we get a clear idea that the boy is desperate and scared.

Example:

• ... a river of sweat flowing down his face ...
• ... his heart beat a hundred beats per second ...
• Shaking and shivering, he could feel his bones rattling inside him.

Thanks for sharing this super writing, Shawaiz.

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