Children's writing: The Window - by Onvi

 
You have set the mood here so well, Onvi. You have painted a picture of boredom by describing the 'penetrating' rain and staring out of the window.

But, the most magical part about this story is that Ariana realises that it's not the weather that controls her emotions - she can control the weather and fireworks appear when she feels joy!

This is a superb idea, Onvi! I love it and really wanted to read more and more about her adventures.

Let's read ...