Children's writing: The Escape Room - by Dhilan

When you shared you story starter in class, Dhilan, I said that I nearly burst into tears - and it's true. We spoke about using a flash forward (foreshadowing) to suggest to the reader what the outcome of the story will be, but not reveal too much. You suggested that Zac's life would change dramatically, and as we later find out, he meets a tragic and fatal end.

You are becoming a master of story telling, Dhilan. You use powerful language just at the right time and never unnecessarily. You often share your thought process with me as you construct a story, and I know you put so much care into the choice of vocabulary, figurative language and indeed the construction of sentences using punctuation for effect.

Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful story.

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