Children's writing: The End of the World - by Shawaiz

 

It's wonderful to see your 'writing, Shawaiz. Your first sentence describing the beat is so powerful and it makes the reader wonder what on earth this animal could be. You use super adjectives (corrosive) and a great simile (like a sharpened knife...)

The corrosive, evil beast slithered through the ice like a sharpened knife slicing through an object. 

Thank you for sharing your lovely writing.

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