Children's writing: The River - by Leonie

Yay! This is a spectacular piece of descriptive writing, Leonie. And ... you are only in Year 4! I know you spent lots of time for this homework thinking about how to describe the scene, and you've used so many of the images from your vocabulary list and have invented powerful ideas of your own. Fantastic! You have chosen lots of literary techniques, such as:-

• ... a cacophony of bird calls ...
• ... as loud as explosives on the battlefield ...
• ...like an exploding fizzy drink ...
• ... a celestial fireball...
• ...a humungous flame...
• ... lances of sunlight ...
• ... silhouette like a monster's hand ...

I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you!

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