Children's writing: The Reindeer - by Krish

You have built up a very clear picture of this snowy scene, Krish. If I didn't have the picture, I'd have a very good idea of where the reindeer was and perhaps how he was feeling. Your tasks was to try and add a little speech, and you've done this very well in three of four places in this writing.

Example:

The reindeer shouted, "HELP!"

This speech is written in capitals with an exclamation mark, so helps the reader to know that the reindeer was shouting and was perhaps scared.

Great job, Krish!

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