Children's writing: The Mysterious House - by Adrian

Wowzers, Adrian! You have created so much tension in this writing by drip-feeding your reader information. Also, you have used sentence structure techniques to help with this, such as short sentences.  (e.g., Creak! It shocked.).

Your figurative language is delicious!

Example:

• Darkness fell like a curtain.
• The haunting shadows of trees danced across the floor.
  

Thank for sharing this wonderful writing.

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