Children's writing: The Asteroid - by Ayush

This writing is packed with lovely images, Ayush. They create a powerful mood in your writing.

Example:

Personification: 'The stars danced in the winter sky.' 

Colour adjectives: 'turquoise / orange'

Powerful adjective for David's hands: 'mighty'. This helps us to imagine imagine how strong he is and how large his hands are!

Thank you for sharing this, Ayush.

Let's read your wonderful writing ...

The Asteroid - by Ayush

A cool breeze fell on David, but he didn’t feel cold.  The stars danced in the winter sky. A turquoise, orange asteroid crashed into the Earth from outer space.  

David was terrified. David threw the turquoise, orange asteroid back with his mighty hands. Then his hands got burned so he had to go to the hospital.