Children's writing: Sunrise - by Anniyah

What a super way to start this story, Anniyah!

'The never-ending drape of orion-grey skies were finally opening up ...'

This is a beautiful metaphor and sets the scene so well. Drape makes the sky sound heavy and therefore it dictates the mood of your writing as we start to read. Top job!

Let's read ...

Sunrise 

The never-ending drape of orion-grey skies were finally opening up to a sedona-orange sunrise, giving Lois hope.

"We can finally see Daisy!!" He said to his duck, Buck. All he had to do now was go through the “sunrise”, and he’d be able to see his mum and sister again. Little did he know that he would first have to go through four of history's biggest monsters.

The boat took longer than Lois’s expectations, so Lois decided to sing a song.
“Oh what a lucky daaaay, for luck is on my siiiiide, I get to see my mom, for luck is on my siiiiide. My sister is still alive, for luck is on my siiiiide, the sun is opening up to me, for luck is on my siiiiide! Oh, yes I’m so lucky, for luck is on my siiiiide, my sister is alive, for luck is on my siiiiide! Oh luck I love you so, for gifting me Buck!”

As the sedona-orange sunrise grew bigger, so did Lois’s excitement.  

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