Children's writing: Stormy Weather - by Anniyah

You are developing your own wonderful style of writing, Anniyah. I can see your writing really appealing to teenagers. It's chatty and the references are just spot on. You are thinking so carefully about how to structure the sentences to convey the action, such as 'headphones on and walked (fast).' This is a great use of brackets to continue the chatty style. You haven't forgotten all those lovely figurative language techniques that you have used for so long in your writing, but now you use them less but to great effect (so, only when they really are useful and serve a purpose) - e.g., 'the bell range fearsomely...' / '...it was so loud the whole neighbourhood was complaining ...'

Thanks you so much for writing this and for sharing it. I loved reading this.

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