Children's writing: developing character emotions - by Sanil

You have shown character emotions so well in this piece, Sanil.

Setting and character descriptions have to work together, and you have done this brilliantly. You have described a calm and tranquil setting and the characters at peace. You then have contrasted this by adding in speech to build the tension, finishing with one character showing his timid and cowardly side, while another is brave and goes looking for the danger.

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