Children's writing: A story (The Mythical Creatures) - by Alicia

 
When I read your independent piece of writing, Alicia, I was struck by how beautiful it was, but also by your talent at creating a unique myth. The idea of the Antarctic having a secret (mermaids) and there being a historical/mythical reason for how this became is just excellent. Teamed with this, your talent for using a full writer's palette of techniques helps the writing to be well structured and full of powerful imagery. Super job!

Let's read ...

 The Mythical Creatures 

A lighthouse sat in the middle of nowhere in Antarctica where there were thick layers of snow which covered its deepest secret ... the mermaids.

Once before, all kinds of mythical creatures roamed earth, earlier than the dinosaurs did; the peacekeepers of the crystal-clear ocean were the mermaids. When the first queen of the mermaids, Amphitrite, felt herself fading, she turned herself into a colourful lighthouse which guided the phoenix and sphinxes when a dark cloud appeared in the colbalt-blue sky, hiding under the marmalade sun which was like a bright beacon on the horizon.

As time changed, all mythical creatures became extinct so suddenly that the ocean cried like a waterfall from day to night in grief at their extinction. While Oceania (the Ocean’s name) sobbed, her magnificent tears became ice, freezing the whole ocean (including herself). “I’m a power beast, but even I can’t stop this destruction.”  

Now, the glitter and sparkles half disappeared from the previously colorful lighthouse, leaving a trail of invisible shimmer and the icicle tears of Oceania.

However, the mythical creatures are starting to be reborn. Because of the global warming, Oceania is starting to melt whilst the skeletons of the mythical creatures are reforming.

Humans must halt at making pollution or no sides will survive. The kraken will destroy everything. Although mythical creatures are amazing, they are dangerous.

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