The Circus - by Eva

The start to your story about the circus is intriguing, Eva: 'I woke up and saw a jug of water in my hand.' This really makes me want to read more. You describe the circus in a wonderfully detailed way, such as the 'red-nosed man with colourful clothes'. The fact that your character is high-up, balancing on a monkey bar makes us wonder what is going to happen. This is a great technique in a story. Once your character gets home, the line, 'I couldn't bare to live my life like that', shows that they are reflecting back on their experience. This is a great story-writing technique. Well done!

It is also important to let people know that with your sister, Amaira, you have written a fantastic collection of 8 short stories (fables) and they are for sale on Amazon. They are brilliantly written, funny and have amazing illustrations.

The book is called: Short Stories: By the children, for the children!: Amazon.co.uk: Deotale, Eva, Deotale, Amaira: 9798594992122: Books

All proceeds of your book sale go to the charity 'Being Purple' (www.beingpurple.co.uk), which is a charity to promote awareness around disability and inclusion.