Children's writing: The Cave - by Shawaiz

As always, Shawaiz, your writing shows that you think deeply about your word choices and revise as you write. This means that you get the most powerful images.

For example, I love your first revision where you added in personification of the roots. You changed the roots from a single noun to something far better.

Example:

roots = helpless, worn roots

Excellent!

Thanks for sharing your writing.

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