Children's Writing: building tension by describing a staircase - by Amila

Thank you for sharing your excellent writing, Amila. In The Weekly Writing Club for this week, we learnt how to describe a character approaching and going up a staircase in order to build tension and move the plot forwards. You've executed your writing brilliantly by starting out with a scene-setting personified opener, 'The bitter wind grabbed at Phoebe's pale arms...'.Your use of the correct terms for features of a staircase add to the tension as your reader can imagine each step the character takes. For example, 'There was no handrail on the stairs. No spindles. No post. Only steps - perilously crooked steps.'

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