Children's writing: A description of a scene - By Tanvi

Thank you Tanvi for sharing this super description. If I were to use a metaphor to describe your use of language, I would say that it is a banquet for us to feast on!

The very first sentence using personification is a great way to set the tone of the piece:

'Roused from its tranquil, glass-like and stagnant position, the cobalt-blue water thrashed uneasily onto the tortilla-brown rocks, signalling to the fishermen to flee.'

A quick guide to how you approached this writing:
First, you thought about three levels to the picture - what you could see on the ground, then at eye level, then in the distance. For each of these elements, you built up a structure across three paragraphs. You described the scene (both seen and imagined) using figurative language, powerful adjectives and verbs and compound-colours. You created a mini-narrative by alluding to the fishermen, their vulnerable boats and of their having fled to a safer environment. This is not a story, and the writing question did not ask for you to imagine that you were there or write about what happens to the people living there.

To add another dimension to the writing, you used weather across all three paragraphs to signal a change in time and to add drama. In the picture, the weather looks beautiful, so you had to use your imagination. 

Thank you so much, Tanvi, for sharing this wonderful, imagery-rich description with us!