Children's writing: Underwater - by Anniyah

What a fabulous way to start your picture response, Anniyah, with personification for the ocean.

The growl of the deep ocean thumped around Sami's helmet.

This creates powerful tension as your reader is forced to imagine the ocean as a living, breathing thing that is not at all happy. The description of Sami having thousands of metres of water above him is just fabulous as it create a claustrophobia in the reader. Top job! Thank you for sharing.

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